AEIS作文讲评：Is the Smart Phone a good or bad thing?

　　今天课窝网和大家分享的AEIS作文话题是十分常见的：Is the Smart Phone a good or bad thing?小编也列出了诸多观点和细节。总而言之，手机的好处还是多于坏处。

　　Advantages：

　　1.Wecan broaden the horizon by using the mobile phone.

　　2.Mobile phones can releasethestressof their users.

　　3.Wecan look upthe wordsin the online dictionary on the mobile phone.

　　4.We can use the mobile phones to take photos.

　　5.Wecan navigatewhatever information we want on the the mobile phone.

　　6.People can find huge amount of information easily to accomplish the school work.

　　7.It is easier to communicate with otherson the mobile phone.

　　8.Cell phones allow us to learn more about current world eventsthan ever before.

　　9.We can buy groceriesanywhere and anytime by mobile phone as we please.

　　10.People can enhance theirconnection withparents and friends.

　　11.People can search some ads onthe mobile phone.

　　12.People can watch movies and listen to musicanytimeand anywhere.

　　13.People can expand their sight through/bylearningmore foreign cultureson the mobile phones than on the traditional media.

　　14.We can pay for commodities throughAlipay or Wechatinstead of cash.

　　15.Mobile phones facilitate information communication between people in that theysend messages more quicklythan the traditional means of communication.

　　16.People can use phones to surf the internet,update their personal micro blog,and upload their latest pictures at any placeand anytime.

　　17.Nowadays many people are under great pressure,while cell phone provides a platform for people to relax themselves by playing minigames,vocal chatting with friends,watching movies and listening to music.

　　18.A wide variety of information attracts you to turn on your cell phone and understand what is happening around you anything and anywhere.People can lean and work on mobile phones,saving time and space.We cangoshopping online.

　　Disadvantages:

　　1.The mobile phoneaffects our eyesight with itselectric wave radiation.

　　2.If studentscan not use it rationally,it will influence theirstudynegatively.

　　3.It reducesthe chance of face to facecommunicationwithourfamilies.

　　4.On the mobilephone,there ismuchinformation which isbad for teenagers' psychological health.

　　5.Mobile phonescanreleaseour personal information, causingsecurityproblems.

　　6.Using cell phonemightmake us stay up late, causingmemoryloss, which has bad impact on our learning ability.

　　7.It has bad influence on children's leaningif they areunderprolonged exposure to mobile phones.

　　8.It people rely too much on mobile phones,theirface to face interactionwill be reduced.

　　9.Huge amounts of information and games on mobile phones occupy us a lot of time and affectour attention.

　　10.The bad habits of people using mobile phones can lead to seriousconsequences,for example,car crash caused by usinga cell phonewhiledriving.

　　这样，主次清楚了之后，立论就立在好处之上。至于如何驳论和立论，现在给大家一个范文参考。

　　Does the smart mobile phone have a good or a bad influence on our life?

　　As the wide use of smart mobile phones, many people complain that using that device has taken their normal life away. （反方观点）Children are addicted to mobile games and neglect their study; adults are indulged into updating their Wechat friends’circle and neglect their physical communication with real friends（反方论据）. However, bad influence like that can not replace all the more benefits mobile phones have brought to our life (立论论点).

　　First of all, smart mobile phones have enabled us to have a far more convenient life than ever before. （立论分论点1）With this miraculous device, we can order our meals, buy our clothes, live in a phone-monitored house, and book hotel rooms.（论据1）Secondly, smart mobile phones have opened a world of huge amount of valuable resources and opportunities that are accessible to our common people. （立论分论点2）We can learn the latest and most explosive news in the world, and can study the best qualified lectures, exchange views with people or even land jobs from other countries.（论据2）

　　From above discussion, we may safely conclude that smart mobile phones do have far more positive influence on our life as long as we can control out time of using them.（以立论+驳论来照应并点题）

　　点评：

　　立意正确。手机是社会发展和科技进步的结果，手机带来的好处是主流，而手机上瘾是可以通过一定手段控制的，因此坏处是次要的。

　　内容丰富有价值。有价值在于选材的典型性、分类的全面性、对读者的启发性。

　　结构合理。引论、立论、结论三部分结构完整、比例协调。

　　层次分明。每一个论点随后都有论据（细节）支撑。另外，正文部分论点与论点之间也形成并列关系。

　　逻辑清楚。从反方观点的陈述到立论，从分论点的提出到论证，再到结论中通过驳论来点题，形成逻辑闭环。

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