12月12日雅思考试|大作文范文解析

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  雅思大作文从根本上来说并非一个纯粹的技术活,它基本上是一个“多看、多写、多改”的过程。但是,一个合理的复习思路,能在某种程度上加快写作水平的提升。

  大作文题目:

  Nowadays, there are many celebrities who are famous for their glamour and wealth rather than achievements. This is a bad example for young people. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

  【话题分类】:社会生活类

  【题目解析】:

  题目大意:当今许多名人因为魅力和财富而知名,却并非由于成就,这给年轻人树立了不好的榜样。你在何种程度上同意这个观点?

  题型特点:对观点需要表明清晰的立场;但该题目观点包含了两部分内容,“前提”与“观点”,考生可能会在如何回应题目时,产生混淆,想到的思路太多,反而不知从何下手。

  【难点】

  本题主要在立论和对题目两部分观点的态度上,容易让考生摇摆。

  建议:请各位考生先明确,写作的目标是“能清晰的表明立场,有理有据的证明”

  这里给各位分享几种不同的观点,和论证思路,在这道题目中都是可行的。

  1.观点完全同意。开头引出现象,表明立场。中间用2-3个论点结合论据,证明这样的名人现象对年轻人有哪些不好的榜样作用。结尾重申观点。

  2.观点完全同意。开头引出现象,表明立场。中间第一段证明这种现象的不利影响,第二段让步虽然这种现象对年轻人也有激励,因为表明成为名人的门槛降低。但终究传递了走捷径便可成功的价值观,并不值得提倡。结尾重申观点。



  3.观点部分同意。开头引出现象,表明‘虽然因魅力和财富出名的名人现象对年轻人有不好的影响,但不乏能树立正面榜样的名人。’中间第一段证明题目中的现象所带来的负面效应,第二段转折表明有一些因真正的成就而知名的名人,他们带来了积极作用。结尾重申观点‘题目中这类现象确实是不好的例子,年轻人应当更关注更为有能力的名人。’

  4.观点部分同意。开头引出现象,表明‘虽然名人对粉丝影响巨大,但其影响本质上取决于受众如何理解,所以不能完全认为是他们树立了不好的榜样。’中间第一段证明一些负面影响是真实可见的,第二段表明这些负面效应并不完全由这些名人导致。结尾重申观点‘的确名人效应很大程度上影响着年轻人,但不能全然认为是他们树立的不好的榜样。’

  以上四种立论,都能做到清晰回答题目的问题。但从逻辑论证的难度来讲,1、2、3对于考生来说,更容易展开和讲清楚。

  *本次范文以思路2为例。

  【写作思路】:

  开头段:当今大家成名更多是由于财富和个人魅力,而非职业成就。一些人认为这给现在年轻人树立了不合适的榜样。我很赞同他们的观点。

  主体第一段:这种趋势影响了:1)年轻一代的日常生活,可能养成奢侈的模式。2)年轻人的思维方式,可能认为很容易就可以成名。

  主体第二段:虽然一些人认为这不一定是坏事,因为成名的门槛降低后,年轻人会认为比之前更容易成功。但当今的名人文化传递的价值观念让年轻人只看到了名利虚妄的一面,却忽视努力的重要性。

  结尾段:总的来说,这种价值观会对年轻人造成负面影响。

  【参考范文】

  These days, celebrities are making headlines more for their glamour and their fortune than their professional accomplishments, which in some people’s opinion, sets unsuitable role models for the young generation. I personally agree with their perspective.

  The adverse influences of this worldwide trend penetrate into young people’s daily life as well as their mindset. When celebrities are only noted for being rich and attractive, children and young adults who adore them are likely to form an extravagant lifestyle, because they sometimes follow their role models blindly. In their quest to live like idols, youngsters often imitate the flashy lifestyles – fast cars, expensive jewelry and designer clothes. On a deeper level, this fascination with appearance and wealth sends out a misleading message to today’s young generation, promoting the idea that hard work and perseverance are less significant, and that success can be achieved easily.

  Some would argue that it is not entirely a bad thing when celebrities are known for their material possessions and glamourous images, because it means that the barrier to fame has been lowered. In this case, young people seem to find success more attainable than it used to be. However, today’s celebrity culture teaches the youth that being a successful person is about little more than having an eye-catching profile. It teaches them to cut corners in order to achieve fame, and to boast about it once they have succeeded. In light of this, they only see the superficial side of fame and possibly do not understand or appreciate the efforts that make one successful.

  To sum up, young individuals can be negatively influenced by vacuous celebrities whose fame is predicated upon very little achievement but image and fortune, since they deliver a set of value that would deteriorate the young generation.

  (297 words)

  【亮点词汇及短语】

  1.make headlines 成为头条

  2.professional accomplishment 职业成就

  3.adverse adj. 负面的

  4.be noted for 因…知名

  5.extravagant adj. 奢侈的

  6.blindly adj. 盲目的

  7.in one’s quest to 在追求…的过程中

  8.designer clothes 名牌服装

  9.on a deeper level 在更深的层次上

  10.send out a message 传递一个信息

  11.promote the idea that … 促进…的想法

  12.material possessions 物质财富

  13.attainable adj. 可获得的

  14.celebrity culture 名人文化

  15.eye-catching adj. 令人注意的

  16.profile n. 外表,轮廓,姿态

  17.cut corners 走捷径

  18.in light of this 鉴于此

  19.superficial adj. 肤浅的

  20.appreciate v. 重视,体会到,意识到

  21.vacuous adj. 无意义的

  22.be predicated upon 以…为基础的

  23.a set of value 一系列价值观

  以上就是小编为大家整理的关于12月12日雅思考试|大作文范文解析,希望对大家有所帮助。更多雅思成绩查询、雅思报名网站等问题可以咨询我们。


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