Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
There are conflicting opinions about whether strict punishments are effective enough to decrease accidents on road. In my opinion, both serious punishments andother measures [b1]are necessary to guarantee drivers ‘ and pedestrians’ safety.
Firstly, punishments canremind drivers to obey the traffic rules for certain[b2].Without those, they may not recognize the importance of well-behaved driving and the danger of accidents. [b3]However, there are several ways of punishments, such as different amount of penalties, reeducation of traffic regulation, confiscation of driving license and even putting into prison. The police officers ought to measure drivers’ behavior according to the laws so as to find out the proper punishment. As a consequence, drivers could be aware of the harm they have done to the society and maintain carefulness while driving.
There is no denying that merely punishing the drivers after the dangerous manners already have existed is limited to improve the traffic condition.Before drivers get permission to drive on the street, they are necessary to gain qualified driving skills,[b4]and that is the duty of driving schools. Besides, the government needs to pay more attention to the condition of traffic lights and streets, which may decrease the rate of accidents.
In conclusion,only when drivers are conscious to follow the traffic rules and the infrastructure constructions are in good quality as well, the traffic accidents can be eliminated.[b5]
[b2]Remind sb. of sth./remind sb that 从句
[b3]建议使用Without引导的虚拟语气，与现在事实相反：without **， would/could/might (not) do 所以：Without those, they would not recognize the importance of well-behaved driving and the danger of accidents.
[b4]They代指的是drivers，可以抵消掉，用个非谓语，necessary是必要的意思，主语很少是人。建议改成：Before getting permission to drive on the street, drivers are required to gain qualified driving skills
[b5]1.倒装句错误，2.be conscious of短语搭配错误3.eliminate用词不太准确，太绝对。建议改成：only when drivers are conscious of following the traffic rules and the infrastructure constructions are in good quality as well, can the traffic accidents be minimized.